It's a long read...
but a few pages made me want to read more....but not tonight...I'm busy....If it passes judgement I'll read the whole thing.
One word of advice...be careful about submitting content and material that's "TOO" origional...you may just give other people the incentive to steal your ideas.
Remember...if you have tallent...and you want to make profit out of it...don't share your work....most artist and book writers are reclusive until their ready to publish...
I can tell you work so hard on this...the imagination and the work and the illlustrations...well...could be better.
But the whole story is pretty good so far.
Remember...if you wanta stay origional...
DONT share so much.
Wait until you published the book then post this online.
That way you have that whole copyright protection...thing.